talk back in class essay; eating disorders

i agree with you on my opening paragraph although i feel it could be stronger and have more detail. i am still working on it and thinking of new ways to start my paper. i need to revise my paper and make sure i stay focused on the topic and don't get off subject. i don't really explain the role of the media on woman i basically describe woman in general who feel overweight. i am going to try to work on this some more and be more clear. this will help me in writing reports for other classes and help me to stay focused on the topic. i dont see anything else wrong other than the mistakes you pointed out to me .